I think it looks good for a portfolio too! I'm very much looking forward to more work from this series!

Really kewl Moo ^0^

Ohhh this is stunning! I love this so much as it is, im scared if the colors dont go and ruin it.

aww this is pretty...cool... i like the way they look..

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i like how the star theme is seen through out the picture.
maybe have the two traced in slightly darker outline? so they pop more from the background.

and the story sound so bittersweet and tragic and exactly what i'm in the mood for just now

will there be more about them?

I didn't go for line weight at all since I wanted to color it in a painting-like style now I hesitate...

And, about the story...I don't know, I might develop Deekay a bit more as a character...or may not

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well then i cant wait to see it in color. and really want to see more about them.

This piece looks really nice so far. The feet are what I like the most about it, actually, and the man's left hand (his left, our right). The wrinkles on the groin and knees of his pants are really tight, too. Although subtle, the background is haunting. I get the impression this man is drowning, and the mermaid-like woman is looking on with a hint of excitement at the prospect of having an underwater sentient friend... (Wrote this before reading the comment, to see if I was right. Wasn't too far off the mark!)

If you're going to keep this piece as a grayscale, you might consider adding more 'darkest-darks' and 'lightest-lights', as my professors call them. It'll make the piece 'op' more and have a much more impressive effect upon first glance. Also, it will add a better sense of weigh to the piece; the single floating stars sprinkled here and there on the man's body are (this could be intentional) distracting to the point that the eye naturally just hastens over them to other, more visually rewarding, aspects of the piece.

I think if you just splash some darker darks and lighter lights on there this piece'll have an excellent sense of weight and importance to it!

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The composition feels nice and balanced to me, but I personally don't like the sharp bend in the mermaid's tail. I think it kind of ruins the flow. (For me, anyway. XD)

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